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Of course, you do write excellently. Still, whatever your theme, topic, let them be same or various, you will be better appreciated if you continue a thread of your one like eveybody else. This thread you have chosen is Nichiro's(aka Hemant Trivedi). If you like interaction you can continue from the last word of "kavithaikku kavithai..." thread regardless of whatever theme the last writer as written about.
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Shambhavi,
Your subject matter and language are excellent.
Try using less words and convey more.
Mother, Motherhood and Girl child along with infanticide(Girls only) are my themes and they come out of deepest corner of my heart.
You are a woman hence you should be able to do a good justice to Divine Mother subject.
After all, You are,
"Shambhavi, Shardaradhya Sharvani Sharma Dayini"
Nichiro
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thank you all so much, as nichiro sd these words are all that i feel, i dont understand what thread means as i am new pls explain. and i write about the divine mother as i feel most for her. i also think that i feel strongly about pain for its most potent to the person suffering the rest of the people can only compare to it but never truly understand how searing it is, i really like nichiro's haiku they are very thought provoking. i hope i am making sense :)
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here is another poem that i wrote 2 days back i know my hteme is repetitive its just that i feel that all my words are transformed when i talk about Her like iron in contact with the philosophers stone
MAY I SEE ONLY YOU IN AL MY HAPPINESS AND IN ALL MY SADNESS,
You are my mother when my heart chooses to play in the garden of life.
You are all that I do, untouched by the mire of life; You alone are my innumerable foibles making a rogue out of a saint.
You alone are responsible for the penury I face; the virtues that I lack. The few that I possess are Yours giving life to this mannequin.
When all that is seen within is without and vice versa;
When the seer and seen are indistinguishable then like a droplet swallowed by the ocean whole shall I be
i haven been able to give it a title pls suggest,thx
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A thread is a page you can use to post your poems, thoughts, separate from the postings of others, exclusively yors where others can give their comments. To start a new thread for yourself go to "Poems/Kavidhaigal" section, click "new topic" on the top left corner, give an appropriate title & start posting & continue posting.
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Dear Friends,
A lot of people are talking of female versus male ratio and female infanticide/female foeticide.
I am posting my frank opinion as under.
Please post your comments.
STILL BORN II
Dear Girl child,
The biggest irony is,
People talk about ,
People read about ,
People discuss about ,
People debate about
The need
To prevent female Foeticide
As dinner discussion.
You come in,
When all have left
To collect the empty plates.
And clean the mess.
Tomorrow,
There will be another day,
Another discussion.
More beer glasses,
More empty plates.
And your subject,
My dear child,
Will be discarded
Like The empty
Sucked out bone,
Left for the dogs.
-Nichiro
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i definitely agree with you but i feel that we have this attitude towards most things for example any tragedy around the world may garner our heartfelt sympathy but rarely do we do anything,rather very few people really do something about it.
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The need of the hour is to create an awareness about the extent of damage that such a trend can do to our race. Related evils like dowry & lack of respect for womanhood should be eradicated first for tackling the problem of declining sex ratio.
Nichiro's despair & anger are well brought out. If good sense cant prevail, if sincere warnings go unheeded cajoling an insensitive population can well be replaced by cudgelling with strict, dreadful law! Fear is more powerful than wisdom!
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Hello PP Madam,
It is with great anguish I write this.
I have seen a lot of discussions taking place about female infanticide and foeticide. I posted a lot of poems in Hindi, Urdu in different fora but people just read and get along. They do not even post a comment.
It is not that they do not respond to my poetry, but it is just theat their senses are immune to hidden cry of those unborn girls.
Really it makes me so sick.
The insensitivity is so much that it one another forum, I posted some poems with this message, even though maximum participants are women, not even a single one responded.
It is pure shame that we are doing what we are doing and it seems we will continue doing it untill a miracle takes place.
I think KALKI AVATAR will not be a male but a female.
And it will not be KALKI AVATAR but KALIKA AVATAR.
Nichiro
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awareness is realy the answer to this problem buti think that we have stopped caring about anythinh that does not directly affect our happiness, i really enjoy all your poems and hope it reaches many more people. if the avatar is kalika then we shall be doubly blessed as not only will she remove our ignorance but also remove our fear and bless