kulandhai!

[mohankumar]

Aasai udan Kathirukkiren kannaa!
En Mundhanaii eapodhu elluppayendru!
Aasai udan Kathirukkiren kannaa!
En dhanangalai eapodhu thoduvayendru!
Aasai udan Kathirukkiren kannaa!
En eravuth thokkathai eppodhu kedduppayendru!
Aasai udan Kathirukkiren kannaa!
En vaertrilirundhu eppodhu veliyil varuvaeii!!

[RR]

welcome mohankumar. I notived that if you take out "En vaertrilirundhu", it becomes a silEdai.

[xlntbarani]

Unnarvukalea Varthayaga..... Nandraga irukirathu

[geno]

Welcome Mohan!

Your poetry is interesting and as RR notes has good "silEdai" kuNam!

Im reminded of an excellent poem by Vairamuthu - "azaippu" - which had the same kind of theme & treatment.

Read that kavithai here :

http://www.forumhub.com/poems/11921.12.46.04.html

(you may need to have some TSC font to read it - coz it is in thamizh script)

[gautham]

oru karppiniyin yethirpaarppu + sumayai suvayaakkum, sugamaakkum yethirpaarppu irandayum appadiyae ullathu ullapadi solli irukkireergal...nanru.