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Topic started by jesee (jebaseelan@sify.com) (@ 203.200.30.4) on Mon May 3 02:23:19 EDT 2004.




Hi All,

I ll be posting some of my emptionally created poets here .....

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" Emotionally Created Poems"

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Please read the headings as

" Emotionally Created Poems"

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It seems Like there is nobody whom i can submit this !!!!!!

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jesee
I had seen this poem. I needed to go through it carefully before I write my comments. Your poem is challenging.. hence the delay.
jesse, your poems are of a different class- having a dimension which portrays the pains and it's cause and effects in other dimensions. ÀÊÁõ ¸¨Ä¼Š§¸¡ô-À¢ý À¢õÀí¸û §À¡Ä ÀÄŨ¸¸Ç¢ø Ţ⸢ÈÐ.
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Jesse,
There is something unique which I have felt in your poems... The feelings are in one level and the "feelings on the feelings"( am I confusing clearly?!) are in other dimensions. This is not an universal happening in other poems.
I have a suggestion - may be you can cut on the adjectives..( "maamisa moolayil" can still be Moolayil and give the same impact"). Hope you do not mind my suggestions.
anpudan
srimangai

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Hi ,(I dont know how to call u . Sudhakar or Srimangai)

Its really appreciating me the comments u feed in about my poems .As u said , Yes I usually weave my poems on a set of feelings rather than generic things or those which are happening (¿¢¸ú׸û) .
Basically some of my poems are those which I speak to my own soul. Criticising The way he tend to be, the way it is . It is some thing like worrying about one's own Children even though one have to accept abt the way they grow up .
Abt adjectives , ye I would like to do that . But some times they give some sort of sync with previous and following lines . I dont want it to be too much descriptive but a bit so that the reader can easily get a grip or interest in the poem .
Am I confusing ????




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Jesee please continue to write your uniquely perspective kavithaikaL :=)
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